Learning Log 16

https://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/3-easy-ways-to-improve-your-grammar
Understand where to use things like commas and apostrophes, and to use it to make your writing flow better. Read other books and stories and use those to help your own. Read your works out loud to proof read them.

Bad:
He's going to, with in reason, kill, destroy, and maim, a lot of the enemy's fleets.

Good:
He will kill, destroy, and main the enemies.


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